To the Rescue![Level 1][GP]

COMPLETED

Tessen

SKILLUPS:
One-Handed Swords + 3
Leather Equipment + 3
Parrying + 1
Alchemy + 0

Trapping + 0

EXPERIENCE:
500 EXP

MONEY:
500 COL

MISC:
BRONZE INGOT x3
TIN INGOT x2
COPPER INGOT x 1
GREEN WOOD STICKS x 2
SILK THREAD x 2

NOTES:
1. The opening was kind of jarring! Instead of starting in media res, you might want to exposit just a little bit more. Yes, I know it's in the quest description, but, you should probably try to set up the scenario.

2. You have a very unique writing style! A bit purple, but that's not entirely a bad thing. However, slightly greater discernment in what is relevant and what is just a meandering segue would probably help you a lot. Sometimes I was honestly left thinking: "I'm not sure why half this paragraph is still here." Which, you have to admit, is not what you want your reader to be thinking! Try to stay reasonable with the pacing, when someone falls they don't really have 300 words worth of thinking to manage, they pretty much go: 'oh dang' and then they are on their butt.

3. When activating a sword art, please mention the glow. Or the name. Or something. I nearly penalized you for using a status effect without a sword art until I realized what you meant by that pommel thing, and while we quest mods are good, we aren't *that* good to know every character's sword art. I know you're going for a 'seamless' mesh, but sword arts, by nature, take at least a second or two of conscious activation, it's not really something you can easily do on the fly.

4. You do write wonderful descriptions and your combat scenes tend to be very fluid. Don't take this criticism as me having not enjoyed this thread, I found it pretty great! Keep it up!

Bandersnatch

SKILLUPS:
One-Handed Swords + 3
Light Metal Equipment + 3
Parrying + 0
Cooking + 1

EXPERIENCE:
500 EXP

MONEY:
500 COL

MISC:
BRONZE INGOT x 3
COPPER INGOT x 3
TIN INGOT x 1
SILK THREAD x 3

NOTES:
It's pretty hard balancing high word count and pacing but you managed that, congrats!

I'm not entirely sure what happened in the initial confrontation between the kobold pair and you guys, but having reviewed it three or four times, I'm pretty sure that the one that screamed in Tessen's post was the one you killed right after, and the one that screamed in your post was the one that Tessen paralyzed. Please double-check with your partner to make sure all events correspond. I didn't deduct points, but, hey, basics!

Also, there's (sadly) no blood and gore in the game. All wounds are just pink/red gashes that glow with a crosshatched pattern. It's actually kind of pretty.

Good job!