CLEARING [Level 1][GP]

NISHA
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Posts: 317
C-LEVEL: 7 (53)

CLEARING [Level 1][GP] Dec 18, 2012 15:20:11 GMT -5

Post by NISHA on Dec 18, 2012 15:20:11 GMT -5

Name.
CLEARING [Level 1][GP]

Location.
Torubana East Road/Torubana Lake

Objective.
The place where I usually fish is being swarmed by all kinds of creatures nowadays, who won´t let me fish in peace. Take out the boars, who usually drink from the lake. They should be right there when you approach the lake from the east road. Eating the acorn close to the forest. After you have done that, go to the lake and kill the two amphibs, who rest on the lake´s shore at this time of day. You can not miss them, they look like a mix of toad and fish.
~Angel Heaway

Enemies:
3 forest boars (clvl-2)
2 ambushing Kobolds (clvl-3)
2 Amphibs (clvl-3)

Participants.
Nisha, Grackis

Requested Rewards.
Nisha: Slab of porks, Catfishs, Vials of blood
Grackis: Ingots and leather

Notes.
N/A

Last Edit: Dec 18, 2012 21:55:23 GMT -5 by NISHA

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grackis MISSING IN ACTION 3 (20)[M:1050] fighting for you down the bloody road to war Posts: 79	CLEARING [Level 1][GP] Dec 18, 2012 19:35:49 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by grackis on Dec 18, 2012 19:35:49 GMT -5 Count me in.
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NISHA PLAYER Posts: 317 C-LEVEL: 7 (53)	CLEARING [Level 1][GP] Dec 18, 2012 19:40:26 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by NISHA on Dec 18, 2012 19:40:26 GMT -5 This quest is full and awaiting approval.
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DUSTY DATA [M:0] Posts: 39	CLEARING [Level 1][GP] Dec 19, 2012 0:20:32 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by DUSTY on Dec 19, 2012 0:20:32 GMT -5 ACCEPTED Reply here with a link to the IC thread and you'll be in progress!

NISHA PLAYER Posts: 317 C-LEVEL: 7 (53)	CLEARING [Level 1][GP] Dec 19, 2012 2:22:50 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by NISHA on Dec 19, 2012 2:22:50 GMT -5 Start
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grackis MISSING IN ACTION 3 (20)[M:1050] fighting for you down the bloody road to war Posts: 79	CLEARING [Level 1][GP] Dec 22, 2012 20:06:40 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by grackis on Dec 22, 2012 20:06:40 GMT -5 Thread Complete
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DUSTY DATA [M:0] Posts: 39	CLEARING [Level 1][GP] Dec 23, 2012 23:06:46 GMT -5 Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by DUSTY on Dec 23, 2012 23:06:46 GMT -5 IN REVIEW [/center][/blockquote][/blockquote][/blockquote]

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CLEARING [Level 1][GP] Dec 24, 2012 0:04:52 GMT -5

Post by DUSTY on Dec 24, 2012 0:04:52 GMT -5

COMPLETED

Nisha

SKILLUPS:
TWO HANDED SWORDS. + 3
LIGHT METAL EQUIPMENT. + 2
PARRYING. + 2
ALCHEMY. +0

STABLE FOOTING. +2
PERCEPTION. +2

EXPERIENCE:
500 EXP

MONEY:
500 COL

MISC:
ANCHOVY x 1
CATFISH x 3
ONION x 1
VIAL OF WEAK BLOOD x 2
SLAB OF PORK x3

NOTES: Is it just my imagination or has your writing improved by quite a bit since we last saw each other? It's a little repetitive in places, but given that it's your second language I am much impressed! I'm not sure if it was a conscious decision on your part to simply eliminate all the it's and its from your writing, and I'm doubly uncertain how to feel about it, but it's very true that it's no longer an issue.

As a friendly suggestion, I'd work on describing speech next. As it is you're doing very well with 'ask' and 'said' (which is great!), but one sentence in particular "Look out Gra." was pretty jarring. Without a 'she shouted' or 'she mumbled' we have no idea how Nisha vocalized it and it ends off coming as pretty stiff!

Still, great work!

Grackis

SKILLUPS:
TWO-HANDED SWORDS + 3
HEAVY METAL ARMOR. + 3
PARRYING. + 0
WEAPON SMITHING + 0

EXPERIENCE:
500 EXP

MONEY:
500 COL

MISC:
BRONZE INGOTS x 2
TIN INGOT x 2
COPPER INGOTS x 3
RAWHIDE LEATHER PIECES x 1
RAWHIDE LEATHER SQUARES x 1
SILK THREAD x1

NOTES:

I like Grackis in his more conversational, contemplative moods. Solid writing throughout - however, the only reason I'm letting you get away with having one of your posts have nearly more speech than prose is because the post is so darn short.

'Chique', btw, is spelled 'chic.'

Nothing else to note! Enjoy the fruits of your labor!